We continue our discussion of the parasite girl story. This is a really good illustration of how story ideas come together, so pay attention.
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 9:06 am
Should probably start with a clear list and outline, yeah. Seems like you remember more than I do.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 9:14 am
Let's start with the biological stuff, work our way further into the future from there. TIMELINE:
1. Little Catholic girl almost killed in (car crash?), is offered new experimental surgery
2. Congress passes law allowing government to send out assassins, serving as judge, juror, and executioner, and using a bullet with holographic technology with evidences of their crimes to explain to government later.
3. Corporation modifies wheat with human brain stem DNA.
And, then... the main characters step in and solve why everybody is dying of Kuru? There's something about bird flu from cysteine in there as well.
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 9:57 am
Sounds good to me, but how far apart are these events?
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 10:01 am
Um, the superhero government assassin is just a current-events character; it doesn't really matter when he was authorized, and, um...
Parasite Girl can be one of the detectives investigating the rash of laughing deaths?
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 2:53 pm
The thing with the Cysteine causing the Avian influenza outbreak should take place a few years before Parasite Organ girl is born. Her (Catholic headmaster?) should know about it, realize that the current Kuru outbreak is operating on the same principle, and tell Parasite Organ Girl about it, only she confuses "Cysteine" with "Sistine," following a dead end red herring. Maybe this leads her down the path of her past and why she has parasites for organs in the first place. I'm not sure how her adventures with the (DEA? FBI? Who's investigating these deaths, anyway?) intersect with the Silver Bullet/Black Arrow, though. As a (member?) of (some investigative agency?) she should be well aware of his exploits. Maybe they get romantically involved together?
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 5:55 pm
I actually really like that flow of events, but the romantically involved bit may be a bit much.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:24 pm
Right, yeah, I didn't really plan on them knowing each other that well either, but it was the only way I could think to tie him into the rest of the plot. She's with the FBI, right? Right? So, sometimes guys are found dead, with a silver bullet between their eyes, and I'd imagine then the FBI would take over jurisdiction. But that still seems so tangential to the rest of it as a whole...
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 6:25 pm
I figured one of her Parasites would cause her to hear voices, which would actually be connected to a secret society super computer or something.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:31 pm
See? That's good.
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 6:34 pm
Maybe she thinks she's schizophrenic half the time because of the fact that she's got a voice in her head that tells her that she's some sort of transhuman demigod.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:35 pm
Yes, yes, keep it coming...how does this work?
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 6:44 pm
The talking parasite? I figure they all have a hive mind, which the girl will initially think is only linked to her, but is also linked to the headquarters. At first they just let her adjust, and live her life as normal, and then the messages begin, and they subtly push her this way and that, hoping that she'll join willingly.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:47 pm
So she could always hear them?
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 6:51 pm
And they could potentially take control of her body, but maybe they fear that she could, being directly connected, override their control, or cause her body to reject the things from an averse psychological reactions.
Maybe one of the lesser directors is her (twist) father, or something, who got her mother pregnant when they were both young, and left her. He hears about his daughter's accident around the time when they're about to begin practical tests, and he pulls some strings. Maybe follow both sides.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:55 pm
Oh, right. That would explain a lot.
And he was Catholic or something? The secret society is Catholicism? No wait, that's stupid. Her mother was Catholic. All right. That's better.
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 6:56 pm
Yeah, the Catholicism is incidental. Maybe it's just her step-dad that's Catholic.
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From POMegranate to Persomem Jan 19, 2012 6:58 pm
No, it's her mother-- and the pastor's use of the word "Cysteine/Sistine" causes her to look further into her past via her mother, and discover her father's secret!
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From Persomem to POMegranate Jan 19, 2012 7:01 pm
Not bad, not bad. We have something altogether more coherent than when we began.
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