This is why the alternate "deleted scenes" version of Redbox diverged from the normal thing. Getting past the "pedophile" vibe of rooming with a kid, I never explicitly stated that Okimba is my roommate here, and in fact is just a kid who sometimes hangs out in this flat because he's an urchin, so what else is he expected to do? Making him an urchin opened up its own problems, especially in his role in the story, but I worked it out, as you'll see in pages following.
Also, in the original deleted scenes version, I missed out on the whole "second thing I notice" bit, which I think is rather nice. The termites also serve to introduce us to Okimba, here, when Okimba is subtly implied to may or may not have a repertoire with the termites, being so bold as to make his presence known after a comment on them. In the "deleted scenes" version, they're just brought up, but nothing is made of them, except for the obvious foreshadowing that it wouldn't be worth it to call an exterminator for them in this day and age.
Then again, in the deleted scenes version, you get to see more of the Dutch guy. In the final version, this is the last you see of him. It's a sort of give-and-take. He also serves to introduce Okimba, and, like the termites, is promptly forgotten.
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